Dear
The speech that you submitted to me for presentation at
John Franklin’s retirement party is excellent with one
minor exception.
Inasmuch as John is somewhat sensitive about his age, I
feel that it would be inappropriate to make any reference
to this fact. I would appreciate it if you would delete
those sections in Paragraphs 6 and 7 which specifically
comment about his age and/or employ the words “golden
years”, and find a suitable substitution.
Once again, the speech is very well written. Thank you.
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